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*''wow that was the worst story i ever read, u should never write again, and i am trying to be mean. Unless you are going to write something that accually is good''
*''OMG! That is so horrible! How could you do that? Ok, apart from the ending, which was absolutely EVIL (and very OOC), please please please write with better syntax? Please? Reading that was pretty close to torture, and I've read some pretty bad stuff. I got really confused within the first 3 sentences. Oh, and also, remember to capitalize Trent's name every time you type it please! I know thats just a little thing, but it makes such a big difference! Also, what is up with Tiffany running to give Daria a hug? She doesnt run anywhere! Anyway. Other than the plot, the characters, the syntax, the setting (where was it supposed to be anyways? You never explained that), and I think i ran out of elements of the story, so yeah, I think it's safe to say this just sucks. It looks like you wrote it in about 5 minutes and then just posted it. Please take more time and actually read over what you've written before you post it! That way you won't get any more reviews like this. It'll also make the universe a safer place for those of us who cannot abide with bad writing.''
*My 3 year old cousin writes better than this maybe you should pay attention in your ELA class and pre-write before you post. -dramatic sigh as the puts her fist through computer screen because of this dumb story-▼
▲*''My 3 year old cousin writes better than this maybe you should pay attention in your ELA class and pre-write before you post. -dramatic sigh as the puts her fist through computer screen because of this dumb story-''
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